Hello, WhiteZeo!
I know this is so late! I have been busy with school, mostly catching up for the time I was slacking. I read the parts, but I never got around to commenting on them, let alone posting my thoughts about them. I suppose it is partly laziness because I have been in more of a mood to read than to comment and note on.
I have finally made it around to posting, which is the reason for this post! Are you ready for it? 
I wasnt too sure about how you were going to go about starting the next legend. I was pondering it in the time between the end of the first and the beginning of the second legend. I was hoping that you wouldnt go through some big fast-forward where like ten years have passed and then go through flashbacks and exposition because I really wanted to know what happened when each of the characters found out about Opaline, as well as how much it affected each of them and their lives as well. So I was very pleased to see that you basically picked up right where you left off, give or take a few hours.
Animus dream . . . I want to jump into that world! The little girl was so adorable. If her attitude and spirit were completely Animus, I want to see just what Animus was like as a child. He sounds like such a cute kid. And his dream daughter was so sweet. I really liked her morning greeting to her parents. That was so sweet. I think it was the good morning, Papa that got me. Either that or the way she bounded into the room and threw herself at the bed. So unbelievably cute! And cute it the whole reason I want to go into that world.
I knew Animus was going to be taking it hard. He was going to give everything he knew, everything that he had worked for in the world, just to be with Opaline. The only thing that mattered to Animus was her and everything connected to her. And to take her away from him would surely devastate him. When Vanault snapped, and Merrick retreated, you knew that Animus would breakdown and question everything that he believed in. You knew that the questions why and how would plague his thoughts in the times to come.
I dont want to be the one to say this, and I am sure Animus doesnt want to hear any of it, but Opaline will always be a part of him. He loved her so deeply that she is a part of him, of who he is, and that is something that I dont think he will ever get rid of. She will always be a part of Animus the way Ephane was always a part of Opaline. Just because she died, does not mean that she is gone. And as much as I dont want to say it . . . I think that is going to be the worst part of it all for Animus, the reminders of Opaline that he will see whenever he looks, the way that she will constantly haunt him in everything that he does. If her death didnt rip him to pieces, the memories and the reminders of her just might.
I really like that you put that in there. I dont know what about it that I enjoyed the most, but it really worked. It was a nice little window into Animus mood and mindset at the time. The fact that he couldnt believe it until he saw it with his own eyes, that he needed the proof of physically seeing it, also provided a lot on his character.
Okay. That just tugged at my heart. I just feel for the guy. This entire thing is so devastating to everyone. You know that anyone who knew Opaline, who truly knew her, who had a deep relationship with her, would be in pieces after this. The main question is whether they will be able to put themselves back together again. They will never be as they were, but will they be close to what they once were? You want them to be, and you hope for them to be, but it doesnt look too bright.
Poor Merrick. First he loses his father, and then he loses his mother. Not only that, but he is told that he was at fault for both of their deaths. He must feel like his is a walking bad luck charm or something. Everyone that is important to him gets hurt or dies because they got too close to him. ::shakes head:: Poor Merrick. You just want to make everything better for him. He is in such a bad place, and he is only a kid. Now he is broken-hearted and he is freezing. I wonder what his thoughts on Shayla are? Does he think that she will hate him when she discovers the truth . . . that he killed Opaline, that he killed his mother, the closest thing that Shayla had to a mother? I think so, considering how irrational he probably is right now.
And Shaylas disbelief that Opaline was dead was so much like Animus first reaction. They both hear that she is dead, and the first thing they think is, that cant be. And they think that with good reason. The entire exchange between Rai and Shayla was great. I felt for the both of them. If Shayla felt that something was wrong because of the link she had with Opaline, it must have been so much worse for Rai, and even Vanault. This is probably so devastating to him, being that he also has (probably) a pretty strong link with Opaline, and he was right there when she died. No wonder he lashed out the way he did. (What is it with me and bringing Vanault into things? He isnt even in these parts, and here I am talking about him. ::sighs:: Either he is really an awesome character, or I am attracted to his random bouts of insanity.)
That was wonderful. The one thing that Shayla says right after she accepts that Opaline has died. Why? And I think that is the one question that cant be answered. I wonder what is going to happen to Shayla after all of this. She is going to be all right, but how soon after this tragedy will she be all right is the question.
That is all I have for everything thus far. I am looking forward to seeing what is going to happen next. Hopefully I wont fall so far behind next time. Forgive me? Now I am off to start some homework . . . that or rewatch the last episode of "The OC". I haven't decided yet. Heehee!
Catch ya later,
Sugarplum
PS. Thanks for all the compliments about my feedback. I am going to have a permanent blush from all the nice things you say.
I know this is so late! I have been busy with school, mostly catching up for the time I was slacking. I read the parts, but I never got around to commenting on them, let alone posting my thoughts about them. I suppose it is partly laziness because I have been in more of a mood to read than to comment and note on.
I have finally made it around to posting, which is the reason for this post! Are you ready for it? I wasnt too sure about how you were going to go about starting the next legend. I was pondering it in the time between the end of the first and the beginning of the second legend. I was hoping that you wouldnt go through some big fast-forward where like ten years have passed and then go through flashbacks and exposition because I really wanted to know what happened when each of the characters found out about Opaline, as well as how much it affected each of them and their lives as well. So I was very pleased to see that you basically picked up right where you left off, give or take a few hours.
Animus dream . . . I want to jump into that world! The little girl was so adorable. If her attitude and spirit were completely Animus, I want to see just what Animus was like as a child. He sounds like such a cute kid.
And his dream daughter was so sweet. I really liked her morning greeting to her parents. That was so sweet. I think it was the good morning, Papa that got me. Either that or the way she bounded into the room and threw herself at the bed. So unbelievably cute! And cute it the whole reason I want to go into that world. I knew Animus was going to be taking it hard. He was going to give everything he knew, everything that he had worked for in the world, just to be with Opaline. The only thing that mattered to Animus was her and everything connected to her. And to take her away from him would surely devastate him. When Vanault snapped, and Merrick retreated, you knew that Animus would breakdown and question everything that he believed in. You knew that the questions why and how would plague his thoughts in the times to come.
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He wanted her to be a part of him, forever.
I dont want to be the one to say this, and I am sure Animus doesnt want to hear any of it, but Opaline will always be a part of him. He loved her so deeply that she is a part of him, of who he is, and that is something that I dont think he will ever get rid of. She will always be a part of Animus the way Ephane was always a part of Opaline. Just because she died, does not mean that she is gone. And as much as I dont want to say it . . . I think that is going to be the worst part of it all for Animus, the reminders of Opaline that he will see whenever he looks, the way that she will constantly haunt him in everything that he does. If her death didnt rip him to pieces, the memories and the reminders of her just might.
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WhiteZeo originally wrote:
So, after having left Ryden with one of his men, he rode down to the clearing to see for himself.
The young man vainly wished that he had simply trusted in what he had heard.
I really like that you put that in there. I dont know what about it that I enjoyed the most, but it really worked. It was a nice little window into Animus mood and mindset at the time. The fact that he couldnt believe it until he saw it with his own eyes, that he needed the proof of physically seeing it, also provided a lot on his character.
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"Tell me, what am I to do now?" he gasped, no longer a proud Animarian general, but simply a lost and broken-hearted man.
Okay. That just tugged at my heart. I just feel for the guy. This entire thing is so devastating to everyone. You know that anyone who knew Opaline, who truly knew her, who had a deep relationship with her, would be in pieces after this. The main question is whether they will be able to put themselves back together again. They will never be as they were, but will they be close to what they once were? You want them to be, and you hope for them to be, but it doesnt look too bright.
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WhiteZeo originally wrote:
His mother was dead and he had killed her; he had to face that reality because there was no other reality left for him to run to.
Poor Merrick. First he loses his father, and then he loses his mother. Not only that, but he is told that he was at fault for both of their deaths. He must feel like his is a walking bad luck charm or something. Everyone that is important to him gets hurt or dies because they got too close to him. ::shakes head:: Poor Merrick. You just want to make everything better for him. He is in such a bad place, and he is only a kid. Now he is broken-hearted and he is freezing. I wonder what his thoughts on Shayla are? Does he think that she will hate him when she discovers the truth . . . that he killed Opaline, that he killed his mother, the closest thing that Shayla had to a mother? I think so, considering how irrational he probably is right now.
And Shaylas disbelief that Opaline was dead was so much like Animus first reaction. They both hear that she is dead, and the first thing they think is, that cant be. And they think that with good reason. The entire exchange between Rai and Shayla was great. I felt for the both of them. If Shayla felt that something was wrong because of the link she had with Opaline, it must have been so much worse for Rai, and even Vanault. This is probably so devastating to him, being that he also has (probably) a pretty strong link with Opaline, and he was right there when she died. No wonder he lashed out the way he did. (What is it with me and bringing Vanault into things? He isnt even in these parts, and here I am talking about him. ::sighs:: Either he is really an awesome character, or I am attracted to his random bouts of insanity.)
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"Why?" Her voice caught in her throat, and as she coughed slightly, the first of many sobs wracked her body.
That was wonderful. The one thing that Shayla says right after she accepts that Opaline has died. Why? And I think that is the one question that cant be answered. I wonder what is going to happen to Shayla after all of this. She is going to be all right, but how soon after this tragedy will she be all right is the question.
That is all I have for everything thus far. I am looking forward to seeing what is going to happen next. Hopefully I wont fall so far behind next time.
Forgive me? Now I am off to start some homework . . . that or rewatch the last episode of "The OC". I haven't decided yet. Heehee!Catch ya later,
Sugarplum
PS. Thanks for all the compliments about my feedback. I am going to have a permanent blush from all the nice things you say.
"The reason it hurts so much to separate
is because our souls are connected . . .
And I know I have spent every life before this one
searching for you.
For your soul and mine must always come together."
~ Noah Calhoun, The Notebook by Nicholas Sparks ~
May you find some comfort here
Outer Haven
is because our souls are connected . . .
And I know I have spent every life before this one
searching for you.
For your soul and mine must always come together."
~ Noah Calhoun, The Notebook by Nicholas Sparks ~
May you find some comfort here
Outer Haven
